Pretty Crazy

This is very interesting. Looks like most of the nitpicks are covered. Just thought I'd let you know I think this is really good. Keep writing it and post more ...

Nope. :P

Myzac, bat wing girl "Guys don't fight," I say. I jut my thumb towards the broken window. "If you want someone to hurt, attack them." Everyone stopped to see what ...

I'm guessing there's a reason you made this short. Not much happened but that doesn't matter. I need to get ready for the reporter. Huh? What reporter? Was this mentioned ...

Hopeful this will explain a little more than the prologue. Enjoy! ------------------------------------------------------------ “But mom, what about hurricanes, predators, and who knows what else!”

I did. I only wish you'd explain more what's going on. Well, this is a prologue. They're kind of supposed to be mysterious . . . Anyway. Good work. I ...

Could you do this? Thanks. :)

Whenever you have time: Thank you. :)

Interesting. It's all one paragraph. You need to break it up into smaller parts so it's less intimidating to read. The action here was good, but there was no description. ...

I read this before too. It doesn't seem like you changed much. Now whether that's a good or bad thing I don't know. I still liked it. It's very original. ...

You had this in your first post. Mind putting in something new? Thanks. :P PS I love this. Anything with powers or along that line interests me. Post more soon!

I think it's a great idea to learn about your fear. It might even make for a better story that way. I must say it was slightly cliche. Kind of ...

This sounds interesting. Definitely something I would continue reading. But be careful. There are a lot of wolf stories about prophecy and such. I'm curious to see what you're going ...

Ooh yes.

Yes. That will be fun. :twisted: Then I guess we'll go to the capital like planned. Where is everyone else?